Check this poem I wrote

I like the ideas and straightforwardness of it and the fact that it is somewhat like a mini motivational speech. Those qualities though may or may not make people become attached to it as there is not much mystique to it and all the meaning is right out there in the open. Over all keep it up! And not to impose but this inspired me to write this real quick:
Pit paddle down the road with a load quite overbearing.
The children walking down the sidewalk
They are hardly caring, always staring at strangers.
A manger was too much to manage for a young god.
I applaud, your arrogance it compliments my malevolence and lately I’ve been relishing
In the fact that little children stare at me when I walk down the street
Because i’m colder than ice and the person they will never get to be.

This is great. And so so relevant. Don’t you love those moments when the universe leads you to something that you really needed to hear?

Much love.

I like it a lot. I like that it’s straight forward, easy but relevant. The shroom line made me laugh.

Nice work