Taking Notice

 Introspectivity (@Introspectivity) 7 years, 9 months ago

This happened the other night so I wrote about it. I would love to hear some feedback or poems others have written.

January 10th, 1:15 AM.
I pause before entering my house,
Listen and turn slowly.
Looking around, as if the sun was shining down on a vibrant parade in the streets.
It was an erie silence.
Matched with a cold, brisk air.
Not a hint of wind, as if time had ceased to exist.
The bare trees, the still grass, bushes so tense such as they stopped mid-stride.
Seeming as though nature knew I was looking.
Staring back at me, waiting for me to enter my suburban asylum.
They knew I was looking…

January 12, 2014 at 4:51 pm
Anonymous (30) (@) 7 years, 9 months ago ago

I love moments like that. Reminded me of this poem I wrote in 2010…

I see you in there. [4/28/10]

Red-Breasted Robin
on a cold chain-link fence
peers at me through
mini-blinds and
double-paned glass.
I look at him, he looks at me.
We do not move.

He sits and gazes,
but I don’t know what he means.

I close the blinds,
wondering if he knows
we were forged in the belly
of the Earth,
made with the breath of stardust.

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Aldrnari (47) (@Aldrnari) 7 years, 9 months ago ago

You woke up for a little while there.

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Anonymous (30) (@) 7 years, 9 months ago ago

I definitely agree. You had a taste of real life without your mind in the way. Life is mostly imaginary due to our beliefs, expectations, opinions, worries, & etc. You definitely need to read this book. TruthContest.Com

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Anonymous (4) (@) 7 years, 9 months ago ago

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Ryan P (32) (@fortitude) 7 years, 9 months ago ago

I think these are the best moments. Becoming fully aware and becoming one with nature. Great poem, makes me want to start writing them again. You have a really good use of imagery, I particularly liked “suburban asylum” and how you put the exact time as the title, very meaningful. Thanks for the read!

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lifegamer (28) (@lifegamer) 7 years, 9 months ago ago

Nice…And Eccentricities’ add was just as notable. Love to See these connects come through & then poetically expressed so perfectly.

Nature is always watching.
With many eyes
Of many colors
Of many styles.
“See me, as We!” She pleads.

Blessings, Kiddo…Write on, indeed! :D

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